| http://www.w3.org/ns/prov#value | - Why do patients only die when I am on duty?Those two sentences grip the reader immediately, and when combined with the rest of what is around her, I think the reader will feel what it is like to be in the elevator, even more.I am intrigued!ReplyDeleteStephscoJanuary 25, 2012 at 5:57 PM@theReallyrealcuriouscrowI like the idea of making the last lines the first.
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