| http://www.w3.org/ns/prov#value | - but, i read the silver umbrella and this chapter after, so id like to let u know that i think youve grown as a writer. there were a number of awkward grammatical errors in the umbrella, though i did quite adore the plot idea. this one is much better grammatically, with only one mistake i can spot. at the end, 'mean' should be 'meant.' also, u have some fantastic ideas floating around in ur brain.
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