| http://www.w3.org/ns/prov#value | - Personally, I think you could have focused more on the mother/daughter relationship, trying to showcase /how/ her mother didn't love her ??? try to pinpoint an event where this was really striking and the main character felt particularly saddened by it (instead you were just constantly telling us that the mother was aloof and bad.) it is a very interesting tangent to explore, and I think you could
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