| http://www.w3.org/ns/prov#value | - I think you gave out enough information, but the second half is definitely stronger than the first half of the piece -- tighter, with each line having a lot more impact and interest.Variety of words other than said is not a problem here, but sometimes your efforts to avoid plain old "said overdo it: take "she said sweetly with just enough sarcasm before turning around and walking down the hall fo
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